Tuxedo's house (Re: New kde.org/hardware webpage)

[Jack]

On 1/26/20 11:51 AM, Philippe Cloutier wrote:
> Hi Ingo, Nate,
>
> Le 2020-01-26 à 11:21, Nate Graham a écrit :
>> On 1/26/20 9:16 AM, Ingo Klöcker wrote:
>>> On Freitag, 24. Januar 2020 15:02:24 CET Philippe Cloutier wrote:
>>>> Ahem, wasn't that fast? The mail you quote is not phrased as a 
>>>> proposal,
>>>> but as a request for comments. Just a quick first look reveals at 
>>>> least
>>>> the following issues:
>>>>
>>>> The currency units used are unclear.
>>>>
>>>>> Tuxedo build tailor-made hardware and all this with Linux!
>>>>
>>>> I suppose s/build/builds/
>>>>
>>>>> All the computers and notebooks are assembled and installed in our 
>>>>> house.
>>>>
>>>> "our house"?
>>>
>>> "in our house" means in the house/building were Tuxedo Computers 
>>> resides. As
>>> opposed to "are assembled and installed in a sweat shop in some 
>>> cheap-labor-
>>> country".
>
> Ah, English is not my native language, but that was certainly based on 
> the English expression "in house", documented on 
> https://en.wiktionary.org/wiki/in_house
>
> Thank you
>
To avoid confusion, you might say " made in-house by Tuxedo, not 
outsourced." or to be more specific and informative, "made in-house by 
Tuxedo in (country), not outsourced."

Jack

>
>>>
>>> Regards,
>>> Ingo
>>>
>>
>> since the text is on KDE.org, using the word "our" makes it unclear 
>> whose house the laptop is being assembled in though. KDE's house?
>
>
> Indeed
>
>
>>
>> It should probably say, "[...] assembled and installed in-house." Or 
>> even, "[...] assembled and installed in-house, not outsourced." to 
>> really drive the point home.
>
>
> Indeed. Some more remarks on that sentence:
>
>  1. "the computers and notebooks" sounds odd (unless Tuxedo assembles
>     paper notebooks).
>  2. It is strange to dedicate 1 sentence out of 5 to this topic. I mean:
>      1. Is assembly and installation even a significant part of the
>         work involved in building a PC?
>      2. Unless we add content describing the enterprise, readers won't
>         even know what Tuxedo is and have any idea what are its labor
>         conditions.
>  3. "installing a computer in a house" sounds like me bringing a
>     computer to my friend's house and plugging in the power and all
>     the other wires. I imagine what was intended was "installing
>     software on a computer".
>
>
>>
>> [...]
>>
>> Nate
>>
> -- 
> Philippe Cloutier
> http://www.philippecloutier.com
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