errors in http://www.kde.org/support/

[Chris Howells]

-----BEGIN PGP SIGNED MESSAGE-----
Hash: SHA1

Hi,

On Monday 28 July 2003 17:14, Itai Seggev wrote:

> 1) In the section Money, "as well as financings" should be "as well as
> financing" (financing is always singular in English).

Good catch, fixed.

> 2) In the same section, there needs to be a comma after "personal check,"
> i.e., it should read "PayPal, personal check, or money transfer."

I think your suggestion is not correct, and that it sounded fine before. Why I 
don't know, but it sounds OK to me.

> 3) In the section Material
>
> In many cases those developers are working on underpowered computing
> setups, especially compiling programs often takes quite some time for
> them, time which could be used for improving KDE instead.
>
> This is a run-on sentence. My suggestion for a fix is
>
> In many cases these developers are working on underpowered computing
> setups. Just compiling programs often takes quite some time for them, time
> which could be used for improving KDE instead.
>
> (i.e, change "those" to "these", replace the comma after setups with a
> period, and substitute "Just" for "especially".)

OK, I've made some changes.

>
> 4) In the same section
>
> Support KDE by donating old or new hardware to a KDE developer near you,
> adopt a geek.
>
> This is also a run-on sentence. My suggestion is to put an "and" before
> "adopt."

Made some changes.

>
> 5) In the first sentence of "Sponsoring": "could not work that well"
> should be "could not work as well", and "on exhibitions" should be "at
> exhibitions".

Fixed, thanks.

> 6) In the next sentence, "on one of the upcoming events" should be "at one
> of the upcoming events". In fact, I'd recommend changing the the phrase to
> "at an upcoming event".

Made some changes.

> 7) In the senetence under "Contributing", "those" should "who".

Changed.

> This is as far as I've gotten in the translation. I've gone ahead and
> incorporated my recommended changes into the Hebrew translation, and I'll
> keep them unless I hear from you that you've opted for a different fix.

I've attached a diff showing the changes that I made.

Thanks for letting us know of your suggestions.

- -- 
Cheers, Chris Howells -- chris at chrishowells.co.uk, howells at kde.org
Web: http://chrishowells.co.uk, PGP ID: 0x33795A2C
KDE/Qt/C++/PHP Developer: http://www.kde.org
-----BEGIN PGP SIGNATURE-----
Version: GnuPG v1.2.2-rc1-SuSE (GNU/Linux)

iD8DBQE/JWdQF8Iu1zN5WiwRAt6IAJ97WqvXOtwjVlCMSNPzC3Nmej8JsgCfUCqL
aLJwrd1+daGodL7G1xiMBv4=
=bdeK
-----END PGP SIGNATURE-----
-------------- next part --------------
Index: index.php
===================================================================
RCS file: /home/kde/www/support/index.php,v
retrieving revision 1.7
diff -u -3 -p -r1.7 index.php
--- index.php	17 Jul 2003 20:35:11 -0000	1.7
+++ index.php	28 Jul 2003 18:11:55 -0000
@@ -51,21 +51,21 @@ The KDE project, just like any other pro
   <h3><a name="Money">Money</a></h3>
 
 <p>
-KDE itself may be totally free, but there are some things that it needs that require money, like hardware upgrades to servers as well as financings of regular developer meetings. One can donate money to KDE e.V. using PayPal, personal check or money transfer.
+KDE itself may be totally free, but there are some things that it needs that require money, like hardware upgrades to servers as well as financing regular developer meetings. One can donate money to KDE e.V. using PayPal, personal check or money transfer.
 </p>
 <p> [ <a href="./support.php">More information on donating money</a> | <a href="../donations.html">Past monetary donations</a> ]</p>
 
   <h3><a name="Material">Material</a></h3>
 
 <p>
-KDE would not exist without the help of many developers who work on it in their spare time. In many cases those developers are working on underpowered computing setups, especially compiling programs often takes quite some time for them, time which could be used for improving KDE instead. Support KDE by donating old or new hardware to a KDE developer near you, adopt a geek.
+KDE would not exist without the help of many developers who work on it in their spare time. In many cases these developers work on underpowered computing setups. Compiling programs often takes quite some time for them, time which could be used for improving KDE instead. Support KDE by donating old or new hardware to a KDE developer near you, in the "adopt a geek" scheme.
 </p>
 <p> [ <a href="http://devel-home.kde.org/~wheeler/adopt-a-geek/">More information on Adopt-a-Geek</a> ]</p>
 
   <h3><a name="Sponsoring">Sponsoring</a></h3>
 
 <p>
-The KDE project could not work that well as it does today without the large network infrastructure of servers and regular support for KDE booths on exhibitions sponsored by many companies and individuals. Sponsor KDE on one of the upcoming events and see you there.
+The KDE project could not work as well as it does today without the large network infrastructure of servers and regular support for KDE booths on exhibitions sponsored by many companies and individuals. You can therefore sponsor KDE at one of the upcoming events.
 </p>
 <p> [ <a href="http://events.kde.org/calendar/coming.phtml">Upcoming KDE events</a> | <a href="./thanks.php">Past and present sponsors</a> ]</p>
 
@@ -74,7 +74,7 @@ The KDE project could not work that well
 <h2><a name="Contributing">Contributing</a></h2>
 
 <p>
-Everyone can contribute to KDE, even if you little about it. In fact, some tasks may be better accomplished by those that know little about it:
+Everyone can contribute to KDE, even if you little about it. In fact, some tasks may be better accomplished by those who know little about it:
 </p>
 <p> [ <a href="#Artwork">Artwork & Icons</a> | <a href="#Enterprise">Enterprise Reports</a> | <a href="#Usability">Usability Studies</a> ]</p>