3.4 announcement suggestions

[Kenneth Wimer]

Hi,

I agree with everything except for the part about the commas.

Bye,
Ken

* Bill Kendrick <nbs at sonic.net> [Mar 16. 2005 19:50]:
> 
> Some comments on the announcement
> (found here: http://kde.org/announcements/announce-3.4.php
> as of Wed Mar 16 18:23:19 UTC 2005)
> 
> 
> 1. Is there a better term we can use to describe KSayIt, other than
>    "speaker-tool"?  It sounds a little akward.
> 
> 
> 2. "It also allows to read out notifications from all KDE applications."
> 
>    That doesn't sound right.  How about:
> 
>    "It also allows all KDE application notifications to be read aloud."
> 
> 
> 3. "Especially partially-sighted people and speech-impaired users will
>    benefit, but it should also prove a fun desktop experience overall."
> 
>    Starting a sentence with "Especially" seems a little akward to me, too.
>    Perhaps something like:
>    
>    "While the improvements will benefit partially-sighted and speech-impaired
>    users the most, they can be fun and useful to all."
> 
>    (Okay, the last part of that needs fixing up, I admit :^) )
> 
> 
> 4. I might be a bit of a comma-phile, but I suggest:
>    "For people with low vision, several high contrast themes,
>    including a complete monochrome icon set, have been added."
> 
>    Or perhaps an 'mdash' (--) before 'serveral' and after 'set'...?
> 
> 
> 5. "Kopete features an improved contact list showing contact photos,
>    improved Kontact integration and supports..."
> 
>    Change "supports" to "support for".
> 
> 
> 6. "...and boasts eighteen packages... PIM..."
> 
>    It might be nice to expand PIM, e.g.:
> 
>    "...PIM (Personal Information Management)..."
> 
> 
> 7. Maybe put "edutainment" in quotes?
> 
> 
> 8. "Highlights at a Glance" section...  I think folks may have already
>    discussed this, but it might be good to briefly describe some of the
>    KDE apps.  Some people might not know what a "Kicker" is, especially
>    if they're brand-new to KDE, or haven't even tried it yet...
> 
>    * "Konqueror (browser), Kate (editor), KPDF (PDF viewer)"
>    * "Kicker (panel/taskbar)"   [I include 'taskbar' for the Win32 folks]
>    * "Kontact (PIM suite)"
>    * "Kopete (instant messenger)"
>    * "Juk (music player)"  [or some more thorough description]
>    * "SVG (Scalable Vector Graphics) images"
> 
> 
> 9. Further, in this section:
> 
>    * "DBUS/HAL support..." -- maybe: "Support for the DBUS/HAL standard..."
> 
>    * "KHTML (KDE's HTML rendering engine)..."
>      (or maybe vice-versa: "KDE's HTML rendering engine (KHTML)..."
> 
>    * "...between 2 PCs..." -- maybe change that to "two", spelled out...
> 
>    * "Akregator allows you to..." sounds like reading RSS feeds is a new
>      feature to some existing program called, Akregator... not that Akregator
>      is new, and it's /purpose/ is to read RSS feeds.  Maybe something like:
> 
>      "Read all of your favo[u]rite RSS (news-feed) enabled websites in one
>      place using the new tool, Akregator"
> 
>    * "KHTML plug-ins ... This does not include Netscape-style plug-ins."
> 
>      Perhaps the "This does not include...", through to the end, should be
>      in parenthesis.
> 
>    * Furthermore, maybe add a "However," to the beginning of
>      "Netscape plug-in in CPU usage can be manually lowered..."
> 
>    * "more than 80,000 contributions with several million lines of code..."
>      Change "with" to "consisting of"???
> 
> 
> I hope that helps some.  Great work everyone, and good luck! :^)
> 
> -- 
> -bill!
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