[kde-community] finding a clear vision for KDE - second draft for discussion

[Stephen Kelly]

Valorie Zimmerman wrote:

> Oooo, Steve! Thank you for capping off an excellent discussion.
> 
> On Tue, Feb 23, 2016 at 1:46 PM, Stephen Kelly <steveire at gmail.com> wrote:
>> I think the form
>>
>>  "A world in which everyone has <foo> their digital life"
>>
>> is fantastic!
>>
>> It doesn't mention KDE. It doesn't have a 'subject' at all.
>> It has a very-inclusive object: 'everyone'
>> It is inspirational
>>
> After reading all of the above, which put into words my inchaote
> thoughts, I would like to offer the following version:

It seems your thoughts are not the same as my words at all :). Your 
suggestion seems to be exactly the opposite of what I wrote in many ways. 

Maybe I don't understand what you mean or what you want to communicate with 
that sentence.

> KDE: control your digital life

You dropped the reference to 'everyone'. You added a reference to KDE. You 
dropped the 'a world in which' making it less inspirational. Altogether it 
seems to me more like a marketing slogan.

Can you say why you made those changes?

Something I think you are right about is:

> Freedom, technology, software, privacy, all of that is IN there.

So for me, this is quite good:

 "A world in which everyone has control in their digital life"

I think it is good for all of the same reasons in my previous email. It is 
also more concise.

Thanks,

Steve.